The Legend of the Silver Comet

[Firebird 40]

Here is an overview of the city.

Here is an overview of the region I am plying in. It looks empty because I have not wrote about them yet.

It's obvious it is a farm town.

Here is the orange orchard.

Here is the apple orchard.

I will be updateing the story part of it soon. Hope you liked the snapshots.

EDIT: I have no idea why the snapshots are so small. Fixed the post above this one.

EDIT2: No idea why the snapshots are not showing, i have even gone with a different host...

EDIT3: Sorry for thoes of you who can not see this in IE, I guess it is an error with the forum because it is fine in ff and opera. Sorry for the problum.

[andymcnab666 4]

Interesting storyline. Extremly different from the traditional City Journal, as you say "SIMCity Journal".

Is it me, or does the story line get a little confusing on the last installment. Plus, where there meant to be pictures in the last post?

Oh well, keep it going and post some more relevent pictures.

[A199999999 0]

Nice Job! can't wait for more.

[dedgren 830]

fire-bird:   I couldn't see the pics in the March 18 update.  I'm gathering maybe you are more into story than the images, but they would be helpful to us "see-and-understand" types.

I'll check back to see if you've sorted this out- let my know if I could be of any help.  I don't get anything other than whitespace where pics are supposed to be in either IE or Firefox.

[Firebird 40]

The Legend of the Silver Comet

Continued

They flew across woodlands. It was hard to believe they were not real because of the amount of detail. They had been flying for hours, it seemed like.

"We should be there in a moment" Ben informed them.

"Good" Will said.

Soon they landed by the police station, in the middle of what looked like a farming village. Almost the entire town was farmland.

"NO MALLS" Lisa outraged.

"You will just have to get used to it" Ben said.

"We better find a way out of this game quick or I am going to go crazy" Lisa said, folding her arms.

"I don't see the problem" Austin said.

"You Wouldn't" she said with a look of loathing on her face.

"Ok--sorry..."

They got of the helicopter and began to walk into the police station. No one was in there but Maxis dummies. They continued through the station and down the street.

"How much further" Will complained, he was the oldest of the bunch.

"Quite a way "Ben replied.

Will moaned.

"Sorry, I don't have a car" Ben said.

This time, everyone frowned at him.

"Hey, I just got here" Ben said.

"So, this is a game, ever heard of CHEATS" Lisa yelled.

"Oh".

"Watch" Lisa said.

She walked toward a red convertible car at a stoplight and opened the door through the open window. She slid into the car, grabbed the Maxis dummy, and threw him out.

"I'll drive" she said.

"Do you have a license?"Ben asked.

"No" she replied, gripping the wheel.

"Then get out!"

"She does not have to" Austin said.

"Yes she does, I am not getting in a car with a 15 year old driving" Ben argued.

"Okay, stay there then" he said opening the back door for Will.

"Ok, but let me sit up front to show you where to go" Ben said defeated.

The light turned green and a couple of cars went through them. Everyone shivered, no one could quite get used to that.

"Ok, fine" she said slightly angry.

She put her foot down on the gas, and they accelerated forward at a great speed.

"STOP, it was a LEFT" Ben yelled.

"OK, ok" she swerved around, hitting a mailbox and throttled forward, turning right.

As all this was happening, a discussion was commencing in a near by city. As it terns out, hundreds have been sucked into the game. And also, the U.S government does know about the mysterious powers of the game that was in almost every household. What's more is that the Silver Comet is due in only a few hours.

Hope you enjoyed it.

[A199999999 0]

opps! double post!

[A199999999 0]

nice job! another great update!

[Firebird 40]

THIS IS THE END OF THIS CJ, I AM CURRENTLY WRITEING A NEW SEQUAL TO IT RIGHT NOW.

I will update this new one more often and I will reply to every post singally. The ending of this cj should keep you on your toes for a while. I will begin the story soon. STORY, not cj. It will be in the off topic section.

[sloppet 3]

darn...

[Firebird 40]

You actually read it sloppet?

[defcon pilot 0]

I love the idea and the plot. Now we just need to work a bit on grammar.

[Ramona Brie 121]

Yes, defcon. It needs revisions.

[andymcnab666 4]

ahh, it ended... oh well, good luck with the sequal