West Ende: A Parish Decent

[Menotyou 0]

Nice pictures!

[manman99 2]

Thank you for all your splendid comments!!!

But in the story of the PC- CG, it has declared war on Freedom Parish just 2 hours ago.  There forces are unmatched and the FP( Feedom Parish) has no idea what to do about this.  They are just a beginning town, how can they outsmart the PC- CG!??

" We shall fight like Alexander the Great" the mayor of FP said, "We must drive our enemies insane with fury and jumble them up to confuse them"!!  The People of Fp are more scared then a mouse next to an elephant, because they are from the PC- CG and they know what they are capable of!!!.............................................. The PC- CG's forces are gathering, and no one knows what to do!!!!!

stay here to see what happens next!!!!

                              Manman99               

[Schulmanator 5,815]

Hmmmmmmm...... will be waiting to see

[manman99 2]

Okay time for another update!! 

Meanwhile, while the troops are gaining in size over in Parishia, the people of FP are very anxious and well organized.  They want to get a start, and they mean a realy start on this rising city before anything continues in the war!  So now there is a huge mass of workers and businessmen ready to take action to this city!

The residential and commercial zonings are just about ready to meet and consolidate, things are now at a very fast pace, most of this construction is in a 4 to 5 year basis.  

The city's first what I think is a mid- rise skyscraper, which makes perfect sense if you think about.  And no I did not plop these buildings!

All because of the big booming industry that I think is easier to look at in the dark!

This is what the city looked like in a 2 year basis!

Then people were flocking like birds and butterflies during a migration season.  And it wasnt just people from Parishia, that was the least amount of people because of the security at the ports.  And then big business hit the city a couple months later!!

And then a year later is happened again! And then you will see City hall to the bottom left!!!

And then this residential building that was being built at the tip of the peninsual was soon going to be the icon of the city!! But you cant see it yet!

Well thats all the time I have for an update, I hope you guys enjoyed this on!!

                          Manman99            

[salut221 10]

Well not so bad , and I'll say good . Your use of these trees makes a great final result .

[Alakazam 3]

Ok, I don't want to seem mean or anything, but I think you should work the city on slopes and stuff. Usually I get annoyed at people who throws at everyone everytime "omg need moar trraforms and wallz" when there's a 5

[jacqulina 162]

great use of the trees it sets of the area quite nicely

[jj88 24]

Looks like this will be good!

I have a few suggestions to help your cj:

1- make sure all your zones have a street/ road/avenue connection

2- before taking pics for the cj, turn off the mission indicators

3- try to build out a bit more before you build up

And good luck with your cj!

[purpledaddy 6]

So to get how the pictures work w/ the storyline, your city is about people organizing as a metropolis of sorts to prepare for a possible invasion?  Okay, it fits.

Meanwhile, don't sweat the negative feedback.  There are different levels of quality of Sim City players and City Journalists.  And there are also different levels in the use of tact.  And unfortunately there sometimes is absolutely no correlation between the two.      But, FWIT, I personally didn't read any intentional flaming;  those giving you the feedback appear to mean well and probably have good advice no matter how they came across.

Good luck w/ your journal.  -Al

 

[manman99 2]

Salut221- well thanks, Im really trying because Ive never really don it with an "official story" before, if I phrased that correctly.

Alakazam- your advice is not really needed for me, Im not being mean, but my city does not have to be realistic, Im not basisng it on any other city in realy life, if this city was a city on Mars, it wouldnt look realistic to anybody here on Earth because people have a different way of thinking and creating.  

Jacqulina- thank you for your kind words!!

jj88- thank you for the advice, these pics were taken a couple weeks ago, I had fixed mostly all the problems with the roads and stuff like that.  o0o0 and actually the city is pretty big, your just seeing only half of it, but there really isnt much more space to go anyways.

purpledaddy- your words intreged me and thank you for that confidence boost, it really helps when I have someone like you, your all great though!! 

                            Manman99                

[Alakazam 3]

When I mean "realistic", I want to say something that makes sense, or more like a city that could actually exist. You misunderstood my meaning.

For me, 50° slopes and buildings that creates huge holes in the mountains are neither beautiful or realist.

I like new ideas and original settings, don't be wrong, but assuming we are on the same planet with same physics theories, your people would leap to their death only by going outside or having a car ride in town.

Cheers.

[manman99 2]

And now for a continuation of the story............................................

But the circumstances were high!!  The PC- CG had now recognized the FP's National Flag and the FP was forced to change in order for the Communists to stop burning and exploding ships with that flag!!  

So it took them at least 5 weeks to come up with a new flag and this is it!

And I know what your thinking, but wouldnt the Communsts discover that "FP" over on the left of the flag!!??  They fortunetly didnt notice and couldnt read the 2 letters, mainly because of all of the military men could not read due to an uneducated system that required only men to learn only math and military accomadations!  So the FP was very smart thinking of this and was confident enough to continue with this flag on their ships to let  people who could escape come to the city safely.

In the future story, which is the present city now, they have extended there borders miles beyond anyone could think, but they had only just begun to devlop in other places and now is becoming strong enough to out- wit the PC- CG, but thats whats going to happen further into the  story, so stay tuned!

Since the PC-CG is tricked and baffled, the FPnow has enough time to extend there works and have more people move in, because they could not continue knowing that people are dying on their ships over in Parishia.  

                        Manman99                 

[salut221 10]

Originally posted by: Alakazam When I mean "realistic", I want to say something that makes sense, or more like a city that could actually exist. You misunderstood my meaning.

For me, 50° slopes and buildings that creates huge holes in the mountains are neither beautiful or realist.

I like new ideas and original settings, don't be wrong, but assuming we are on the same planet with same physics theories, your people would leap to their death only by going outside or having a car ride in town.

Cheers.quote>

~ Edited by Chocolatemax.  Although what you were saying wasn't that offensive.  You were taking a personal attack at someone, but I will not allow you to think because you speak in another language you can hide what you are saying or get away with anything.  That will not be tolerated and don't do it again. 

There is no wrong doing with constructive criticism.  Please keep onto topic.  Thanks, choco. ~

[Alakazam 3]

Manman: I must say that I like efforts you put into this CJ, and it shows. The story is original and well put, and the city is well done and is good looking (I'm just being nickpicking here tbh, I just want to help you with my comments, so I don't want to be mean or anything)

I'm eager to see what will happen next. (Your CJ is probably one which I'm the most commenting on)

~ Edited by Chocolatemax just for the sake of clearing this up. ~

[salut221 10]

Originally posted by: salut221

Originally posted by: Alakazam When I mean "realistic", I want to say something that makes sense, or more like a city that could actually exist. You misunderstood my meaning.

For me, 50° slopes and buildings that creates huge holes in the mountains are neither beautiful or realist.

I like new ideas and original settings, don't be wrong, but assuming we are on the same planet with same physics theories, your people would leap to their death only by going outside or having a car ride in town.

Cheers.quote>

~ Edited by Chocolatemax.  Although what you were saying wasn't that offensive.  You were taking a personal attack at someone, but I will not allow you to think because you speak in another language you can hide what you are saying or get away with anything.  That will not be tolerated and don't do it again. 

There is no wrong doing with constructive criticism.  Please keep onto topic.  Thanks, choco. ~quote>

No problem choco , will no do it again , promise .

[manman99 2]

Okay now that we have that out of the way.........

Time for another update, and this one took me a while because again, my pictures were assorted by dates and times, but taken on different time................. that doesent make sense but oh well!!  

Now just a reminder these pictures were talen before hand, and the city is quite different from what you are looking at!

Now todays update has 9 pics!  Enjoy!!

We start out with me expanding the city with new roads soon to be more commerce and residencies, but Im not working on that right now, we are now at a crutial part of the FP's existence!!

But I still have a lot more space to go, but dont pay attention to the top, pay attention to the middle and the bottom!

Now here is the crutial part!!  If you remember when I showed you that building that I said would be the FP's future icon, well here it is being built!

Even though Parishia has skyscrapers, the people of Parishia were always so anxious to get across that they could not wait to see this magnificent building that they could actually live in!!

But this district also, will become the wealthiest district in the entire city!!

Here is a picture taken when it was completed with the whole city, a year before the roads expanded.

Here is what the city looked like a year after it was built!

Oh yea I forgot to mention................. I had also put 2 new marinas for the public to get their minds off of things in the water!!

Just a couple of night piiccss....................

And thats all I have for you to see today of the flurishing Feedom Parish!!

Thanks

                            Manman99                      

[manman99 2]

Okay guys, this isnt a real update, its just a lil info. of what is going on in the Parish City today, in which I mean the one that you dont see at this moment, but one that you all will see in the future.

City Wise FP and PC- CG

Population: roughly 160,000 people

Average Commute Time:  about 45 minutes

Area Sq. Miles: I estimated about 100 square miles.

Area Sq. Kilometers: about 260 square kilometers

War Wise

Bombings:  12 ( but bombings will be later in the CJ

Cargo( Freedom Ships) Destroyed: 3

Misc.

Natural Disasters( PC- CG): 3 smog storms!! due to pollution and poor maintence!

Natural Disasters( FP): 0 due to  many flurishing parks, high maintence, and recylcing centers!.............. and luck of the weather!

Buildings fallen( PC- CG) :  26 for low upkeep on.................. Everything and raging citezens!

Buildings Fallen( FP): 3 due to bombings and arsens!!

Its just a lil somethin somethin that I decided to put up, but next week will be a new update!

                          Manman99                

[Giligone 10]

I like the terrain in your city. Its not often you see someone trying to build on such steep slopes. Looks good. Your cities a bit small though... but I guess that'll just take time eh? haha.. ohhh I'm so Canadian.

[manman99 2]

Heyy guys, its time for another update of THE STORY and maybe a lil bit of pics, if I can get what I want up here.  But anyways..................

Freedom Parish is now a burgeoning city and flurishing with life, people, trees, buildings, roads, homes, and much much more.  But the PC- CG has now commissioned an act called the 

"Overload Tyranny Act" or "OTA".  This process the goevernment said, will take at least 20 years to take effect in the entire country.  The people of FP do not realize the consequence of this new act............... In fact, they have never heard of its existance yet!!  But for now FP is building far and wide, new horizons are coming about in this new city.  And time, much time, has now passed and we are almost 20 years into the future, when the OTA is taking affect, and the FP has gathered an empire so large in the amount of time, not to mention all the rugged terrain in the area. Take a look at the link, but dont bother with any signs on the pics.   

FP now holds about 150,000 residents and is gaining quickly.  But during these times of Tranquility and Prosperity, the PC-CG, a small and horrid nation, is plotting its now deadly attack against the people of Freedom Parish.  Its now a rough time in the cities life, but Destiny holds something different for this great empire of People.......................................................

                                  Manman99                     

[manman99 2]

Heyy guys!!! This just a small update.  A mini slide show, loke the last one, only with 3 pictures.

https://s121.photobucket.com/albums/o227/manman990/?action=view&current=1165360983.pbw

                           Manman99              

[jesusnavidad 0]

Quetion. Im starting my own CJ. How do i make it look like yours? Not exacly alike but you know what I mean.

[manman99 2]

Id be happy to give you help and advice jesusnavidad but your going to have to private message me, because Im still working on this CJ and its better to do so rather than on here

                           Manman99               

[ilikehotdogsalot 311]

Good work! I really like this cj!

[tjperry88 24]

I must say, you have a unique way of City Planning.

[jacqulina 162]

wonderfull work my friend i loved the slide show,great pics,some nice building there

[manman99 2]

Okay its been a while since the last time I have updated.  This is another part of the story and a pic or 2.

So for 20 years Parish City grows and grows in abundance of comfort and joy,  but this day............... this day was different.  The shore, the beautiful shore of the peninsula, is being ravaged by this, this green water and muck.  Red smoke, yes red, is is coming toward the city.  Clouds, dark gloomy clouds fill the sky beyond sight and people are looking toward the Communist country.  People are beginning to panic, but not to the point where it is a complete threat to them, and they continue their day.

3 hours later.  it is still the same outside and now the red smoke has gotten thicker,  its not poisonous, but people are too afraid to go outside now.  them in the distant strait, people see something, a ship, a large ship, nothing they have ever see in their ports.  It moves up the river, and begins to stop at an abnormally fast time.  The city got quiet, so much so if u were to drop a pen, you would here it echo through the city streets and hear it ten blocks down.  People are nervous, they watch at a somewhat safe point, the ship then makes this loud, deep, spine tingling blow from the blowhorn, and a soon as it stopped, the fog cleared, the clouds disappeared, and people saw the ship, the flag holdong the symbols of the Parishia City Communism!  And then its 20 ft guns moved into position and "BOOM", it shot towards a residential building and down it went!

People are now trapped by all of these magnificently doomed 300 to 1300 ft. skycrapers.

They are scaterring, screaming, jumping on ships running into water to swim away.  "BOOM" another shot from those deadly cannons and down goes a 600ft. office tower.  The ports were then detinated and blown to bits, with people on them.  

What was that noise, a roaring noise.  A huge bomber,carrying what seemed like a nuclear bomb.  People are then petrified and cant move.  They see the bomb drop.  Slowly and anxiously, the peolle from all over the city, see the bomb drop, and, destiny awaits the people of Freedom Parish.

END BOOK 1

                          Manman99            

 But This Is Only The Beginning 

[Schulmanator 5,815]

Whoa! Wonder what will happen next!

[exgamer07 0]

Originally posted by: salut221 I'll say (honestly of course) that it's not good work . Check for your slopes and terraforming and don't put nowhere buildings . I mean that it's very not realistic . Your first CJ was good , bad to see that you loose it . Try to build on flat maps , or do terraforming . Hope that helps.

And admirator Salut221quote>

A completely flat city isn't realistic. The fact that he has buidlings ontop of hills makes it very realistic. The only suggestion I would make is to make the gride boxes downtown more wider. You can fit more jobs and residents that way.

[manman99 2]

shulmanator: just wait, well here it is lol.

exgamer07: thank you for the advice!!

Okay its time to start the next series of Parish City: WEST ENDE!!! Book 2.  

Chapter 1: The Strive

As time went by, it seemed as there were no survivors in Freedom Parish.  But in fact............... there were, way out in the boundaries of the city.  Around 3000 survivors lay injured or possibly untouched.  They set out to what used to be the old ports of Freedom Parish, and to there surprise (and extreme luck) there was a boat big enough to fit all of them!! They immediate got whatever supplies they could, boarded the ship, and left the ravaged city.  West they continued in search for new land, land that they would claim as theirs and theirs only.  

Now, 30 years later, the city the founded, in Which they call West Ende, which is sybolic for their journey west and their end for the search for new land sprawl and to create new West Endeans(lol).  This city I mind you I started from scratch, layed out all of the roads, subway systems, ports monumenets, buildings etc.  And this map is also terraformed by yours truly.  

West Ende contains more than 450,000 people and is still growing.

Here it is as it is now.

This city is very hard, considering some of the terrain I have to deal with. Hope you all enjoyed.

                        Manman99              

[manman99 2]

Okay this is no addition to the story but it is a map of the different boroughs and districts.

Yellow -Borough

Blue- District

If you see blue and yellow pointing to one name, thats the name of the dutrict and the borough.

                          Manman99