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III • A Short Story

Tonraq

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@avrelivs

--Well that wasn't very nice...

First of all you said that this CJ was terribly rushed... I would like to tell you that due to the help of my family, it only took 4 hours. Second of all, the newspaper was original, and you should look carefully because I wrote everything in it.

@escilnavia

--You're the hero!

Thanks for commenting... I made Joe Walsh myself and I never knew someone named Joe Walsh...

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A Short Story (10 syllables per line)

Why 10 syllables per line?

I was reading A Midsummer's Night's Dream by Shakespeare and I found out that in 1600s, all the plays were written in 10 syllables per line... Now, I am attempting to do the same -- in 2011.

An old gallant chiding forest of fear,

Lies a town bounded with mortal changelings.

With carelessness falls upon ol' townsfolk,

In greater fear no man hath set upon,

A blaze that would destroy the quaint commune.

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A quaint town lies forgotten mortal souls,

With disaster eating away feared folks,

They lose all of of their livelihood being.

All the mighty becomes the very weak,

All the giants become the poor midgets,

All the living became the putrid dead.

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It becomes the unforgivable truth...

This is where the true life begins the new fire.

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恐怖の古い勇敢な批判する森林、

嘘が町は殺人チェンジリングで囲まれる。

不注意では、オール'町民に落ちる

大きい恐れてだれにもかれらは、時に設定

古風な趣のあるコミューンを破壊してしまう火災。

古風な趣のある町では、人間の魂を忘れてある

災害では、恐れていた人々を離れて食べる

彼らは生活されるのはすべて失われます。

すべての偉大な、非常に弱くなる

すべての巨人は、貧しい人々小人になる

すべての生き物は、腐敗死者となった。

それが許されない真実になる...

真の人生は、新しい火を開始する場所、これがあります。

Update

Back in More... More... Now!

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Interesting so far. I liked your method of narration there, haha. Looking forward to your next few entries!
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Interesting things going on in your CJ...

Great newspaper, although perhaps a little too faded to read easily.

Loving the iambic pentameter.
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Hehe, technically, it's "Three Newspaper". I believe if you want it to be "Three Newspapers" it'd have to be "三部の新聞" (Although, since your cj is named "Troix" maybe the goal should be "Three Newspaper" hahah, in which case please ignore me). Anyways, interesting stuff you have going on here. I'll continue paying attention to it:)!
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